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Off-Topic » What's Going Through you Mind Right Now?

Want to know what people think about my fan fic..

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I always need to know what people think of my work.. and if i don't hear anything i always think people hate/dislike it


Post by gaetzan (7 posts) See mini bio Level 6

Fan-Fic » The normals school - Chapter III ~Ra's evil side~

Rating: 18A Disclaimer: Angel Beats! and all characters/settings are property of the original creator P.A. Works and Aniplex . This is a work of fan created fiction based off of these characters. All rights reserved.

*The next day at the first lunch break.*

Kratos-''Ra I got something for you.' [Grabs something in his pocket.]

Ra-''hhm.. What's so special that you woke up all by yourself?'

Kratos-''I don't want to be close to the angel' [He says while he hands her the money.]

Ra-''But I like Kanade.' [She says as she takes the money.]

Kratos-''So were going to sit by her anyway?'

Ra-''Yup.. But this time I don't have to beg for food.' [She says with a smile]


*They walk to the canteen. As soon as they stand in the line someone throws a can of drink at Ra.*

Kratos-[Kicks it so hard that is shatters to pieces, And then shouts.] ''Who threw that!'

Ra-''Kratos calm down, We can't get in trouble.' [She says while putting her hand on his shoulder]

Kratos-''Tch...' ''But he better doesn't show his face.'

*As soon as Ra and Kratos were walking back to their classroom. A tall bald person with big muscles shouted at them.*

Bald guy-''SHINIGAMI'S.' [He shouts while walking straight at them. Behind him walks a small group of 10 persons including him all with a tattoo of an skull on their hand.]

*Ra and Kratos turn around to see who shouted at them.*

Bald guy-''So you finally show your self's' [He says while he comes close to Ra's face with his face]

Ra-''What do you mean with that?'

Bald guy-''I mean that you were to scared to show yourselves after we broke all the desks.'

Kratos-''So you were the ones that broke the desks.'

Gang member 1-''Yes we did.' [He says with a confident smile.]

Ra-[Sigh] ''I bet you know what happens when we get in trouble.'

Bald guy-''We do and were going to beat you up!' [He says while lashes out at Ra]

Ra-[Evades and then says in a devilish voice.] ''Normally I wouldn't even waste a second on you. But what you did probably took some time. And I'll gladly reward you for that.' [As soon as she said that she shoots two knives out of her sleeves at his arms. Both knives are connected to her with a chain which is wrapped around her arms. The knives emit a faint black light.'

Bald guy-[Screams] ''AAAAAA....' [He gets silenced by Ra who kicks him to the ground with the sole of her shoe. While smiling devilish.]

*The rest of the gang looks scared at Ra. As do the others who are in the canteen.*

Kratos-''Tch..' [Looks away.]

Ra-[Withdraws the blades with the chains.] ''I bet you that you've beaten up lots of people haven't you?' [She says while shoot the knives again, This time she hits the legs of two gang members, As soon as They hit them they start to emit more light.] ''Is anyone going to answer me, or do I have to cripple all of you?'

Gang member 2-''W-w-w-we h-have..' [He says very scared.]

Ra-''Did you beat up any shinigami's?'

Gang member 2-''A-a-as m-m-m-much as we could..'

Ra-''Then It's time that someone beat you up.' [She says while still smiling devilish, Withdrawing the knives.]

*Some gang members try to run away.*

Ra-[She shoots the two knives hitting 2 members in the legs, At the same time she shoots multiple chains with which she entangles the rest of the gang members.] ''There's no way I'm going to let you escape.'

*Meanwhile in the classroom of 4B*

Male student-[Runs inside while shouting.] ''You have to see this, The female shinigami is beating up the skull gang!'

Yuri-''Are you serious?!'

Male student-''If you don't believe me you can go see yourself.'

*As soon as they arrive, The knives are no longer emitting black light but are completely black and the ground is stained with blood. all gang members except the bald one are hanging upside down lifted by the chains, Ra is kicking the leader in the curb. And laughs in a devilish way.*

Kanade-''Why is she doing that.' [She asks Kratos.]

Kratos-''So you're finally here.'

Yuri-''Why is Ra behaving like that!'

Kratos-''That's the way she acts towards people she hates.'

Otonashi-''Shouldn't you stop her before she kills them!'

Kratos-[Sigh.] ''That's easy for you to say, Do you have any idea what she would do to me if I would try that!?'

Hinata-''You can't mean that she would hurt you..'

Kratos-''Oh she will hurt me.'

Kanade-''Will she kill them?'

Kratos-''She won't, We just need to wait until she is done with punishing them.'

Yuri-''And when is that?'

Kratos-''It shouldn't take long, Could I ask you guys a question?'

Otonashi-''What kind of question?'

Kratos-''Who are those guys and why do they all have the same tattoo?'

Yuri-''They are the skull gang, The tattoo shows that their a member.'

Kratos-''Do they make much trouble?'

Kanade-''They do.'

Kratos-''Like what?'

Hinata-''They break things they steal things they beat up students and teachers, They even beat up the director once.'

Kratos-''In that case I think we're going to be rewarded..'

Yuri-''For almost killing 10 students?..'

Kratos-''Would you keep beating people up after someone nearly kills you because you tried to beat him/her up?'

Kanade-''Of course you wouldn't..'

Kratos-''Which means they will probably change..'

Otonashi-''And stop causing so much trouble..'

Kanade-''Is there really no way we can stop her?'

Kratos-[Sigh.]''You could try to shout her name as hard as you can and hope that she responds.'

Post by gaetzan (7 posts) See mini bio Level 6

Fan-Fic » The normals school - Chapter II ~Our hero~

Rating: PG

Disclaimer: Angel Beats! and all characters/settings are property of the original creator P.A. Works and Aniplex . This is a work of fan created fiction based off of these characters. All rights reserved.

*The next day at the start of the first lunch break.*

Ra-''Kratos wake up.' [She says while she's shaking Kratos.]

Kratos-''Is the lesson over?'

Ra-''I wouldn't be waking you up if it was not over.'

Kratos-''So who're you going to ask for food today?'

Ra-''The same group as yesterday. But today you are going to be nice.'

Kratos-[quickly changes from a sleeping position to a normal sitting position] ''What why would you w....'

Ra-''If you dare to say one mean thing to her. I will hit you so hard that you won't wake up for days! You understand?'


Ra-''I didn't hear a I understand.'

Kratos-''I understand.'

Ra-''Good then let's go.'

*They walk towards Yuri Kanade Otonashi and Hinata*

Ra-''Hey Kanade could you share your food again with me today?'

Kanade-''Of course I can.'

Ra-''thank you.' [She says while she takes a chair]

Yuri-''Did you have to bring that idiot with you?' [She says with a irritated voice]

Ra-''If you're going to be nice to him he will be nice to you.'

Yuri-''He wasn't nice yesterday. And we didn't even say anything back then.'

Kratos-''Yes but yesterday she did not tell me to be nice.'

Hinata-''And with that you mean?'

Otonashi-''I think he means with that that he's forced to be nice.'


Kanade-''Ra could I ask you something?'


Kanade-''Yesterday while I was in the library I saw a book called: The great war story's of Ra Nakamura. And I was wondering if you were connected to her in a way?'

Ra-''Yes I am!' [She says proudly] ''And Kratos will explain how I am connected to her!'

Kratos-[Sighs] ''Did you read the book or did you just see the cover of the book?'

Kanade-''I only saw the cover of the book.'

Kratos-''Well since you're an angel you must have heard about the great massacre that happened at your sacred tree. Where a shinigami single handedly killed a 1000 trained normals 300 angels and 5 sacred knights.'

*Yuri Otonashi and Hinata all say at the same time*

Yuri-''How can one shinigami kill so many people!?'

Otonashi-''Are you serious!?'

Hinata-''Are you kidding me!?'

Kanade-''I was told that a whole army ambushed the sacred tree.'

Ra-''Is that what they told you?'


Kratos-''And you believe that?'

Kanade-''It sounds more logical then one shinigami slaying all those guards..'

Kratos-''Your sacred tree was guarded with 3 army's. Do you think anyone is stupid enough to try and ambush something like that. In the middle of a war?'


Kratos-''And why do you think that?'

Kanade-''Because it sounds like a suicide mission..'


Otonashi-''Then how could this Ra kill all those men?'

Kratos-''She had forged a scythe made entirely of void crystals.'

Kanade-''But void crystals are extremely hard and dangerous to gather. Even the sacred knights don't last long in those dimensions!'

Kratos-''That just proves how strong she all ready was without it.'

Kanade-''Is there any prove that this weapon exists?'

Ra-''The Yutau clan posses it since her death.' [She says with a angry voice]

Kratos-''And it is the reason that you angels accepted our offer of peace.'

Yuri-''Aren't the Yutau the strongest shinigami clan.?'

Kratos-''Yes they are.'

Hinata-''Then why doesn't anyone know about them having such a powerful weapon?'

Ra-''The warlord doesn't like to attract attention.'

Otonashi-''You know that you still haven't told us how you are connected to her..?'

Kratos-''It's important to know who she is. And not only because without her we would still be at war. But also because she's our hero.'

*Ding dong the bell rings to announce the start of the next lesson*

Ra-''We'll continue this when the next break starts..'

Kanade-''That's a shame..'

Yuri-''This lesson better goes fast..'

Otonashi-''I hope so too. Can't wait for the next break..'


*Ding dong the bell announces the start of the next break Ra and Kratos immediately go to the group*

Hinata-''Finally the lesson is over.'

Kanade-''Well continue the story..'

Kratos-''Where was I...'

Yuri-''You were going to tell us how their connected.'

Kratos-''Ah yes..' ''As you all know Ra's family is poor. And they always have been, But only because your family is poor doesn't mean that one cannot be beautiful. And the son of the Yutau's warlord fell in love with one of Ra's family members.'

Otonashi-''How much did he love her?'

Kratos-''He loved her so much that one night he ran away with her. Abandoning everything that he owned.' ''After one year of searching for them the Yutau clan found them. They lived in the shed of a farm together with a baby. They wanted him to return immediately. But he refused to leave he said he didn't want to leave and that he would rather die than leave her alone with the baby.'

Yuri-''aww.. That's so sweet.'

Otonashi-''And that baby was the Ra Nakamura that's mentioned in that book? '

Kratos-''Yes she is.'

Kanade-''Let him finish the story.'

Kratos-''The Yutau clan naturally didn't want to kill the warlords son and after a few hours they came to an agreement with him. They would pay the rent and all the clothes the kid would need. But she would need to keep quiet about the baby being one of the Yutau's.'

Yuri-''Why would he agree to something like that after he said he would rather die!'

Ra-''Because he wasn't a total idiot and knew that they could easily kill her and the baby.'

Otonashi-''So he didn't have a choice...'


Kratos-''Well I think that's all there is to it..'

Ra-''It is.'

*She says at the same time the school bell rings*

Yuri-''Well see you later.'

Otonashi-''See you!'


Kanade-''See you again.'


Ra-''See you!'

*After the last school bell rings everyone starts to leave the school*

Ra-''Kratos wake up.' [She shakes him]

Kratos-''Is it finally over?'

Ra-''It is. See you tomorrow.'


Kratos-[Unlocks the front gate and walks inside where he gets greeted by their butler.]

Butler-''Good day sir Kratos how was school?'

Kratos-[Sigh] ''Just tell me where and what my dad wants from me.'

Butler-''The master is waiting in the training yard.'

Kratos-''Tch..' ''I'm not in the mood to train. Tell him to meet me in the living room'

Butler-''The master won't be happy to hear that.'

Kratos-''Well I don't really care about that.'

Butler-''As you wish.'

*A few minutes later in the living room. Kratos his dad furiously walk in with his sword drawn. He is tall and has long purple hair and green eyes.*

Dad-''What do you think you're doing !'

Kratos-''I'm watching TV..'

Dad-''You know that isn't what I meant!' [He hits Kratos with the back of his sword.]

Kratos-''Ouch!' ''What was that for!' [He says while trying to hit him.]

Dad-[Evades it] ''That was for letting me walk all the way to here, Now tell me why you don't want to train today!'

Kratos-''Tch..' ''Ra made me explain a lot so I didn't get much sleep..'

Dad-''And yesterday you couldn't sleep because you had no desk.'

Kratos-''It's not my fault that she wants to be with some normals and a angel. Who ask a lot of questions.'

Dad-''All right if you clean the training yard I won't bother you anymore about it today.'

Kratos-''What that's unfair!'

Dad-''It's either that or I'll start with training you right now!'

Kratos-''Okay I'm going to clean the training yard.'

Post by gaetzan (7 posts) See mini bio Level 6

Fan-Fic » The normals school - rated PG

rating: PG

Disclaimer: Angel Beats! and all characters/settings are property of the original creator P.A. Works and Aniplex . This is a work of fan created fiction based off of these characters. All rights reserved.

*Ding dong the school bells ring and everyone starts to walk to the classroom. Today's a special day for class 4B because today the two students from the military academy will join their school. To see if shinigami's can join the normal schools.*

Teacher- ''All right everyone sit down so that the new students can introduce themselves.'

*2 Minutes later the class is silent and the two students enter the room. The first one who enters is a girl with black hair which reaches to her shoulders and has red eyes, the second student is a boy with spiky purple hair and purple eyes.*

Teacher- ''Why don't you two start introducing yourself.'

Girl student-''My name is Ra Nakamura....' ''And I don't see any empty desk where we can sit?'

Teacher-''well about that...' ''someone broke all the desks in the storage room last night. But we will make sure that you two have a desk by at least tomorrow.'

Male student-''Tch...' ''Well that's not something I expected.'

Ra-''Well it's not like any one would expect someone to break all the desks.'

Male student-''Yeah your right..' 'Then I'll start introducing myself I am Kratos .'

Ra-''So where will we sit without any desks?'

Teacher-''I'll get some cardboard boxes for you as soon as I set everyone to work.'

Ra-''Sure we'll be sitting at the back of the class.'

*Ding dong the school bells announce the begin of the first lunch break.*

Ra-''Aaah...[She stretches herself] 'Finally the lesson is over..By backs killing me.'

Kratos- *Sigh* ''The lessons always took long but now we also have to sit on the floor with cardboard boxes as desks which made it even longer since I couldn't sleep'

Ra-*Her stomach makes noise* ''Well I have bigger problems than not getting any sleep in school...'

Kratos-''Like finding someone that wants to share some of their lunch with you?'

Ra-''Exactly...' ''And I think that I'm going to start at that table.' [She points at a table with 4 people.-Two boys one with blue hair and has purple eyes. The other one has orange hair and brown eyes. And two girls. One with purple hair and green eyes. the Other girl has white hair and yellow eyes.]

Kratos-''Well good luck with that.'

Ra-''Thanks I could surely use some luck.' [She stands up and walks towards the four persons. Which takes only a couple of steps]

Ra-[She pat the purple haired girl on her shoulder]''Hey could I....' [She stops and starts to blush as soon as the purple haired girl looks at her]

Purple haired girl-''What is it?'

Ra-''eeeh......eehm....C-could I....What are your names?'

Purple haired girl-''My name is Yuri'

Blue haired boy-''My name is Hideki Hinata'

Orange haired boy-''I'm called Yuzuru Otonashi'

White haired girl-''I am Tachibana Kanade nice to meet you'

yuri-''What is it that you wanted?'

Ra-''Well...I wanted to ask if I could borrow some food....'

Hinata- ''huuh.... Why would you want to borrow some food?'

Ra-''Because I....' [She starts to blush again] ''Because my family is very poor..'

Kanade-''I don't mind if you take some food from me I can't eat it all anyway.'

Ra-''Thank you.' [She says with a big smile.]

*Ra calls Kratos and waves for him to come.*

Kratos-''What is it?'

Ra-''Found someone that's willing to share her food.'

*They take some chairs and sit on them*

Otonashi-''You know I always thought that shinigami's were more...How should I put it...aggressive.'

Kratos-''Tch... That's just a prejudice that the angels made to get you normals to join their side.' [He says while suddenly looking at Tachibana with a pretty angry face.]

Kanade-''How did you know that I'm an angel?' [She asks with a surprised face.]

Ra-''He comes from a family that used to keep angels outside of our city's.'

Kratos-''Just to let you know I hate angels so don't speak to me except if it's really important.'

Yuri-[Stands up very quickly knocking over her chair and furiously hits the table] ''How could you hate her when you don't even know her!'

Kratos-''It's not that I only hate her I hate all angels.'

Yuri-''Oh your one of those idiots who just hates someone without even knowing them!'

Kratos-''Well that only appli...'

Ra-''Kratos that's enough.'


*Tachibana Otonashi Yuri and Hinata all look with a surprised face.*

Hinata-''Did you give him a order just now?'

Ra-''Yes I did.'

Tachibana-''Is he your slave?'

Ra-''Yes he is.' [she says with a devilish smile]

Otonashi-''Slave?.. what do you mean with that?'

Kratos-''It means that she chained our souls together and put some kind of bomb in me that she can trigger whenever she wants'

Hinata-''Shinigami's have such a power that they can chain their souls to others!?'

Ra-''You know I think we're talking about a different kind of soul here..'

Yuri-''How do you mean different kind of soul?'

Kratos-[sigh] ''I'll explain it for you...' ''You see we shinigami's have some kind of extra organ that we call our soul it is the thing that makes us better and stronger than you normals.' ''But it's not only there to make us stronger we also need it to live. Just as much as we need our hearts.' ''but it also enables us to put it bluntly blow things up. Create special swords and much much more.'

*Ding dong just when he finished his sentence the school bell's began to ring*

Ra-[Sigh] ''Let's get back to our improvised desks shall we? See you later.'


Hinata-''See you later!'

Otonashi-''See you.'


*Ding dong as the last school bell rang everyone slowly began to leave the school.*

Ra-''Well that last lesson took awful long to finally end.'

Kratos-''And I didn't get any sleep this lesson either.'

Ra-''At least you don't have to go to a home where you're not wanted.'

Kratos-''No I have to go to a home where they ask to much of me.' [He says irritated]

Ra-''At least they love you.'


*they both head home without saying another word to another*

Ra-[She unlocks the door to her home and walks inside until she reaches the living room. Where her father is watching TV. Her father is a middle aged man is bald and has red eyes. While her mother is cooking diner her mother wears a cloak and a mask so you can't see much of her.] ''I'm home.'

Father-''I could hear that, Now sit down at the table and be quiet. I am watching my favorite show'

Ra-[Sigh] ''Sure... You always do.' [She says with a depressed face.'

Father-''You have a problem with that?'

Ra-''I didn't mean it like that.' [She says frightened]

Father-''And after you've eaten dinner you're going to do your homework and then go to bed.'

Ra-''Yes father.'

Post by gaetzan (7 posts) See mini bio Level 6

Fan-Fic » The "Stories to Come" Thread

Well I had an idea to write some kind of fan fiction.

First I would like to say that this is my first time writing a story.

Well the story is set in a world where shinigami's (not the shinigami's like in bleach) angels and of course normal people live. The shinigami's and angels both have their strengths and are different in personality's while the angels have more dexterity and are more friendly, The shinigami's have brute power and are more aggressive. they have fought many wars but are currently at peace with each other for many years now. the story takes place on a normal high school who made a contract with the military academy (the school were shinigami's are sent to) to see if shinigami's can go to normal high schools.

Well that's my idea.

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